Simmons & Simmons Answer

OVLD68

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    Hi, I was hoping someone could critique my answer to the Simmons & Simmons question. I obviously only have 250 words but decided to cover a wide range of experiences.

    Please give details of your interests and activities, positions of responsibility, skills and achievements. Please also include any other information relevant to your application. (250 words max)

    For the past two years, I've attended Arabic lessons (currently at A1 proficiency) to broaden my global perspective. I have always wanted to speak another language, appreciating the challenge and cultural depth it provides.

    As Lead Legal Advisor for XYZ, I am responsible for delegating tasks to other team members, leading client meetings, and having the final say on all official correspondence before submission. This has greatly increased my communication, leadership and teamwork abilities.

    Similarly, as a Wellbeing Ambassador, I am responsible for organising welfare events and providing guidance to students, strengthening my interpersonal and communication skills.

    My most noteworthy achievement is being named the Regional Winner of the XYZ. My paper on XYZ offered a fresh perspective on the evolving XYZ dynamics. This award was open to all undergraduate students globally and was judged by an expert panel comprising leading academics and industry professionals, making it a very proud accomplishment.

    I have also secured the competitive COMBAR Scholarship. While I believe my skills are better suited to a career as a solicitor, I was eager to pursue this opportunity as it allows me to view commercial law from a more holistic perspective, seeing how commercial litigation plays out in a courtroom.

    I would also like to note that I had mitigating circumstances in the first year of my undergraduate degree. I won’t discuss them here, due to the word count, but I can provide them.
     
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    Jessica Booker

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    Hi, I was hoping someone could critique my answer to the Simmons & Simmons question. I obviously only have 250 words but decided to cover a wide range of experiences.

    Please give details of your interests and activities, positions of responsibility, skills and achievements. Please also include any other information relevant to your application. (250 words max)

    For the past two years, I've attended Arabic lessons (currently at A1 proficiency) to broaden my global perspective. I have always wanted to speak another language, appreciating the challenge and cultural depth it provides.

    As Lead Legal Advisor for XYZ, I am responsible for delegating tasks to other team members, leading client meetings, and having the final say on all official correspondence before submission. This has greatly increased my communication, leadership and teamwork abilities.

    Similarly, as a Wellbeing Ambassador, I am responsible for organising welfare events and providing guidance to students, strengthening my interpersonal and communication skills.

    My most noteworthy achievement is being named the Regional Winner of the XYZ. My paper on XYZ offered a fresh perspective on the evolving XYZ dynamics. This award was open to all undergraduate students globally and was judged by an expert panel comprising leading academics and industry professionals, making it a very proud accomplishment.

    I have also secured the competitive COMBAR Scholarship. While I believe my skills are better suited to a career as a solicitor, I was eager to pursue this opportunity as it allows me to view commercial law from a more holistic perspective, seeing how commercial litigation plays out in a courtroom.

    I would also like to note that I had mitigating circumstances in the first year of my undergraduate degree. I won’t discuss them here, due to the word count, but I can provide them.
    I know I have mentioned this before, but it’s important to avoid contracted words. Not only do they make your document less formal but you are not using them consistently. This will be flagged an as attention to detail issue.

    I wouldn’t word the mitigating circumstances like you currently have. It’s important to put some context in rather than than using word count up to say you can’t provide details because of lack of word count. You are currently writing 35 words when it could be changed to 35 words to something like the following:

    My first year university grades were impacted by illness from March to June 2024. My university were aware of the circumstances and further details can be provided if required.

    I would also try to build in more outcomes or success into your Well Being and Legal Advisor paragraphs.
     

    OVLD68

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    I know I have mentioned this before, but it’s important to avoid contracted words. Not only do they make your document less formal but you are not using them consistently. This will be flagged an as attention to detail issue.

    I wouldn’t word the mitigating circumstances like you currently have. It’s important to put some context in rather than than using word count up to say you can’t provide details because of lack of word count. You are currently writing 35 words when it could be changed to 35 words to something like the following:

    My first year university grades were impacted by illness from March to June 2024. My university were aware of the circumstances and further details can be provided if required.

    I would also try to build in more outcomes or success into your Well Being and Legal Advisor paragraphs.
    Okay perfect, what do you think can go on the chopping block to build on the skills part? I was thinking of removing the wellbeing ambassador part entirely to build on the Legal Advisor point, but I'm not sure. I suppose the COMBAR part could be removed as it's hardly relevant, but it was quite hard to get onto and does show some wider commercial law access.

    Apologies about the contracted words - I promise I do change them before I submit it.
     

    Jessica Booker

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    Okay perfect, what do you think can go on the chopping block to build on the skills part? I was thinking of removing the wellbeing ambassador part entirely to build on the Legal Advisor point, but I'm not sure. I suppose the COMBAR part could be removed as it's hardly relevant, but it was quite hard to get onto and does show some wider commercial law access.

    Apologies about the contracted words - I promise I do change them before I submit it.
    I don’t think you need to reference skills - it is more about showing outcomes /success (the result/reaction part of the STARR format).

    Are any of these entries in your work experience section? If so, they can then be removed to avoid the repetition.
     

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